Almost modern parents don't want to teach their children by "spanking children " . Smacking children has some bad influences on relationship between parents and their children.In fact,the amount of " overwhelming parents " who don't spank their children is not counting. It means that many parents still hit their children to teach them.spanking is not a violent teaching children way.If parents know how to choose and have a spanking children plant ,not follow to their reflection. Spanking has advantages in teaching children.
Spanking helps children learn how to keep away from dangerous things. When children don't know how to avoid dangerous things -to touch the hot stove or run into a busy street - and don't understand what their parent reminded , they do wrong thing more easily. If parents just remind or criticize them , they still have difficuty in knowing their mistakes . On the other way, Parents spanking to help them realize what is wrong or dangerous thing and never do it again. In fact , their parents aren't always in side them to remind,so spanking is the best way to get profound impression of not doing wrong thing.
Some family just have a son, so they very indulged in their children's demands. Children think that they are a " navel of universe ". Their character will be shaped by spanking way . Sometime , children do wrong things , their parents always blame it on other person or situation. Althought parents know clearly what wrong their children do, they still defend them. Slapping make their children know what they should do or not allow to do.when they make some wrongs they just have responsibility for their mistakes. Spanking may effect badly to relationship between parents and children . But if parents don't hurt their children a lot. After spanking ,parents should hug them in their arm and remind them not to do it again. Parents shouldn't spanking them in front of many people,which can make their children feel ashamed.
In sum, each parents has many different teaching ways. But the top of the aim is help children .All parents in the world very love their children,which is true. In fact, children should be indulge and taught softly , but sometime parents should use a strong way - spanking them to help them better. Spanking is not bad selection to teach their children.
Spanking helps children learn how to keep away from dangerous things. When children don't know how to avoid dangerous things -to touch the hot stove or run into a busy street - and don't understand what their parent reminded , they do wrong thing more easily. If parents just remind or criticize them , they still have difficuty in knowing their mistakes . On the other way, Parents spanking to help them realize what is wrong or dangerous thing and never do it again. In fact , their parents aren't always in side them to remind,so spanking is the best way to get profound impression of not doing wrong thing.
Some family just have a son, so they very indulged in their children's demands. Children think that they are a " navel of universe ". Their character will be shaped by spanking way . Sometime , children do wrong things , their parents always blame it on other person or situation. Althought parents know clearly what wrong their children do, they still defend them. Slapping make their children know what they should do or not allow to do.when they make some wrongs they just have responsibility for their mistakes. Spanking may effect badly to relationship between parents and children . But if parents don't hurt their children a lot. After spanking ,parents should hug them in their arm and remind them not to do it again. Parents shouldn't spanking them in front of many people,which can make their children feel ashamed.
In sum, each parents has many different teaching ways. But the top of the aim is help children .All parents in the world very love their children,which is true. In fact, children should be indulge and taught softly , but sometime parents should use a strong way - spanking them to help them better. Spanking is not bad selection to teach their children.
I like the way you think strong punishment can help children a lots. After reading your essay, i found it interestind, however, i have some comment for you :
Trả lờiXóaAbout Organization : you organize your essay well, it has 3 particular parts.However, I cant understand the meaning of the second pagaraph of the body: you'd better have a topic sentence like " spanking children prevent children from the thinking " they're they only child and they are important", your pagaraph will be easier to understand.
About development : it's well done. However, you should change this sentence to make it more persuadsive,such as:
" Spanking effect badly to relationship between parents and children", we should use "Spanking may effect badly.....", or "Spanking just effect badly to relationship between parents and children when they hit their children a lot".
you should use some example to make your idea deeper.
-you should use more connecting word when change the idea.
About language:
First of all, about grammar:
-" If parents just to remind or criticize them" => "...just remind.." right?, i'm not sure about this but i think your sentence isnt smooth.
-"Some family have just a son"==> "...just have.."
-you should use :" their children's demand " in stead of " their children demand "
-"children think they is a..." should be changed by " they are the navel of universe "
-"when they make some wrong" , "wrong" is used as a noun, you should write " make some wrongs "
-you should use " the top of the aim is to help " in stead of " ...aim is help.."
-"each parents has many different teaching ways", i think you should change "each parents have their own teaching ways" is better.
-"children should be indulge" => "...indulged.."
You also use some wrong words such as:
-"don't understand what their parent reminded" i think you should use "remember" in stead of "understand"
-"On the other way", i think "in the other way" or " in the other hand " is better
-" their parents aren't always in side them to remind" you should use beside, not in side
- your topic is "spanking children..." however, sometimes you use smacking or slapping. If your toppic is " use violent punishment", you can use these words, however, when your topic is spanking, you should use spanking in the whole essay.
Those are my comment about you. Hope you can pay attentionto them so that you can improve in the future.
If you have free time, why dont you visit my blog and correct my essay, i think i have many mistake that need corrections, and i'm very glad when you help me to do that.
Wish you a nice day. ^^
Only suitable for minors?:
Trả lờiXóaPeople used to think it was necessary to "spank" adult members of the community, college students, military trainees, and prisoners. In some countries they still do. In our country, it is considered sexual battery if a person over the age of 18 is "spanked", but only if over the age of 18.
For one thing, because the buttocks are so close to the sex organs, anal region, and so multiply linked to sexual nerve centers, striking them can trigger powerful and involuntary sexual stimulus in some people. There are numerous physiological ways in which it can be intentionally or unintentionally sexually abusive, but I won't list them all here. One can read the testimony, documentation, and educational resources available from the website of Parents and Teachers Against Violence In Education at www.nospank.net
Child bottom-battering vs. DISCIPLINE:
Child bottom-battering (euphemistically labeled "spanking","swatting","switching","smacking", "paddling",or other cute-sounding names) for the purpose of gaining compliance is nothing more than an inherited bad habit.
Its a good idea for people to take a look at what they are doing, and learn how to DISCIPLINE instead of hit.
There are several reasons why child bottom-battering isn't a good idea. Here are some good, quick reads recommended by professionals:
Plain Talk About Spanking
by Jordan Riak
http://www.nospank.net/pt2010.pdf
The Sexual Dangers of Spanking Children
by Tom Johnson
http://nospank.net/sdsc2.pdf
NO VITAL ORGANS THERE, So They Say
by Lesli Taylor MD and Adah Maurer PhD
http://nospank.net/taylor.htm
Just a handful of those helping to raise awareness of why child bottom-slapping/battering isn't a good idea:
American Academy of Pediatrics,
American Academy of Child and Adolescent Psychiatry,
American Psychological Association,
Center For Effective Discipline,
Churches' Network For Non-Violence,
Nobel Peace Prize recipient Archbishop Desmond Tutu,
Parenting In Jesus' Footsteps,
Global Initiative To End All Corporal Punishment of Children,
United Nations Committee on the Rights of the Child.
In 31 nations, child corporal punishment is prohibited by law (with more in process). In fact, the US was the only UN member that did not ratify the Convention on the Rights of the Child.
The US states with the highest crime rates and the poorest academic performance are also the ones with the highest rates of child corporal punishment.
There is simply no evidence to suggest that child bottom-battering instills virtue.
Only suitable for minors?:
Trả lờiXóaPeople used to think it was necessary to "spank" adult members of the community, college students, military trainees, and prisoners. In some countries they still do. In our country, it is considered sexual battery if a person over the age of 18 is "spanked", but only if over the age of 18.
For one thing, because the buttocks are so close to the sex organs, anal region, and so multiply linked to sexual nerve centers, striking them can trigger powerful and involuntary sexual stimulus in some people. There are numerous physiological ways in which it can be intentionally or unintentionally sexually abusive, but I won't list them all here. One can read the testimony, documentation, and educational resources available from the website of Parents and Teachers Against Violence In Education at www.nospank.net
Child bottom-battering vs. DISCIPLINE:
Child bottom-battering (euphemistically labeled "spanking","swatting","switching","smacking", "paddling",or other cute-sounding names) for the purpose of gaining compliance is nothing more than an inherited bad habit.
Its a good idea for people to take a look at what they are doing, and learn how to DISCIPLINE instead of hit.
There are several reasons why child bottom-battering isn't a good idea. Here are some good, quick reads recommended by professionals:
Plain Talk About Spanking
by Jordan Riak
http://www.nospank.net/pt2010.pdf
The Sexual Dangers of Spanking Children
by Tom Johnson
http://nospank.net/sdsc2.pdf
NO VITAL ORGANS THERE, So They Say
by Lesli Taylor MD and Adah Maurer PhD
http://nospank.net/taylor.htm
Just a handful of those helping to raise awareness of why child bottom-slapping/battering isn't a good idea:
Trả lờiXóaAmerican Academy of Pediatrics,
American Academy of Child and Adolescent Psychiatry,
American Psychological Association,
Center For Effective Discipline,
Churches' Network For Non-Violence,
Nobel Peace Prize recipient Archbishop Desmond Tutu,
Parenting In Jesus' Footsteps,
Global Initiative To End All Corporal Punishment of Children,
United Nations Committee on the Rights of the Child.
In 31 nations, child corporal punishment is prohibited by law (with more in process). In fact, the US was the only UN member that did not ratify the Convention on the Rights of the Child.
The US states with the highest crime rates and the poorest academic performance are also the ones with the highest rates of child corporal punishment.
There is simply no evidence to suggest that child bottom-battering instills virtue.
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Trả lờiXóaMark: 7.6